-You can jog your plan's section line in order to show everything on multiple levels
-Manipulate your static elements to give your space more fluidity
-You DON'T need glass inside
-Remove glass around desk to better connect the different levels
-Remove interior wall behind desk to offer a larger work area
-make shelves and desk one element that connects the top floor to the bottom floor
-Feels like Frank Lloyd Wright
-Very anchored, fort-like
-great clear and concise drawings
-Entrance:keep fort-like feeling but break it up as you move through it
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ReplyDelete-you should know how to make glass work properly so do not have polygon pieces of window; break the glass into rectangles with mullions
-you must show the construction type in plan as the walls seem to indicate the building is made of concrete
-there is redundancy between the axonometrics as well as the exterior and interior perspectives
-consider two boards and using different image sizes so that there is a sense of hierarchy in viewing what image is first and then the secondary/tertiary elements
-your orthographics should showcase some of the context (i.e. trees and path) so that it is easier to understand that the project sits in a particular site
-line weights are not especially strong so please fix them; you will also need to show silhouettes of the author in the building to demonstrate in the orthos how he uses the spaces you have created
-lighten up the renderings as well as sequence them properly; use photoshop to do this as well as bring in the views through the glass to make the images convey the amount of light and views that would be present
-to better emphasize Stanislav's comments about the transition and gradient from the entry to the writer's area, you might want to use the roof and puncture skylights to perhaps set up a roof skylight above the writer's desk whereas at the entry you may find that the roof is solid; this build up of transitional gradients of light might help you
-your site plan is brutally underwhelming and freehand(?)