A few additional comments to supplement the review: -your project has very little sense of material composition and assembly; what is you building made of and how will you show it appropriately? -the design is crude in certain parts where there is little evidence of an awareness of how materials and parts come together (the east elevation 5-sided window, the strang condition at the adjacent section between the diagonal glazing and the horizontal element, etc.) -there is a lack of precision, accuracy, and adherence to drawing convention which still pervades the project (such as how to draw windows, ceiling thicknesses, etc.) -there is little evidence of a clear design intention with respect to the design as expressed in the drawings provided; if you cannot get a student outside the section to look at your drawing set and guess your design intention, the project imagery has failed you
A few additional comments to supplement the review:
ReplyDelete-your project has very little sense of material composition and assembly; what is you building made of and how will you show it appropriately?
-the design is crude in certain parts where there is little evidence of an awareness of how materials and parts come together (the east elevation 5-sided window, the strang condition at the adjacent section between the diagonal glazing and the horizontal element, etc.)
-there is a lack of precision, accuracy, and adherence to drawing convention which still pervades the project (such as how to draw windows, ceiling thicknesses, etc.)
-there is little evidence of a clear design intention with respect to the design as expressed in the drawings provided; if you cannot get a student outside the section to look at your drawing set and guess your design intention, the project imagery has failed you